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Caught in a dream I see him
His insides are rotten
Fruit left out too long
Expired and sickly sweet
But then he turned hard and grey
Behind my dreaming eyelids
Drying to concrete beneath the tires of some unknown car
I am a bug stuck on the windshield
Too small to notice
Insignificant
But he shifted again, melting to rain
To wash me away
Cooling the fever that I couldn’t sweat out
I groaned in my sleep, fearing this unreal reality
He changed again, disappeared, vaporized
Filling my lungs with exhaust as the concrete disintegrated
And the dust blinded my eyes
Into my brain the debris traveled
Turning into 109 maggots to eat away my insides
To make me match his own rotting innards
My fingers unconsciously gripped sweaty sheets
Groping in the night, I couldn’t wake up
Even as he changed his form again, solidifying before my eyes
I return to the bug’s body on the glass
He breaks through the wind shield
Clenched fist, bloody knuckles
I cry out for someone to shake me from this nightmare
Shards fly around me, a snake appears and it is him again
His twisted tongue darts out of his mouth
Licking the glass as it crashes past
Tainting them all
The rotten spit held his filthy words but
Light shone through and illuminated
Everything
His lies sparkled
And turned the color of disappointment
Blindly I flew away on flimsy wings
Willing myself awake
I flew faster and never looked back
©2009 ~DekayingSlow
:icondekayingslow:

Author's Comments

Written in the beginning of March, but only recently finished the editing.

Another, yes another, Creative Writing poem.
I need the submission credit so bear with me for these.

Though this one actually has meaning, to me anyways.
Bad guy, bad relationship.
I'm trying to come to terms with it now, even though it's over a year later. I can think about it without shuddering so it's a start. There might be another part to this poem, but I'm not sure.

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:iconpaimonerra:
WOW. I love it, it's. Erm. Well now after reading it, as if I wasn't crappy enough at words, I certainly have nothing good to say NOW.

So I'll say:
OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH MYGOD.

Maybe this is your calling? Poetry? Writing in general, though I've so far only read your poetry. But it's fantastic.
You should fine some kind of way to combine your poetry and your photography. Dunno how, but that would be dynamite.
:iconpaimonerra:
And also, hearing your say on the meaning made me go back and re-read it, and now reading it is almost hard. I mean, it's super powerful. Amazing job.
:icondekayingslow:
Well this is awkward cause I don't know what to say either.;; lol.

I do like writing poems a lot. I don't know what it is but I'll stare at something and lines just pop into my head. :P
Oh. Ohh. That'd be nice. I like combining things. I'll have to figure out how to make that work.

--
I found a criminal use for your pillow
I love you terribly, I swear that this is true
But I just can't stop my hands from smothering you
:icondekayingslow:
Thanks so much man! :D

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I found a criminal use for your pillow
I love you terribly, I swear that this is true
But I just can't stop my hands from smothering you
:iconpaimonerra:
Next time if you don't know what to say, just pretend I never commented. x'D

You definately need to figure that out. Definately. :0
:icondekayingslow:
Haha, will do. Maybe. xDD

Ho yeah. :D

--
I found a criminal use for your pillow
I love you terribly, I swear that this is true
But I just can't stop my hands from smothering you

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